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Post by fox on Aug 22, 2006 8:43:04 GMT -5
Before you join, you MUST read about RPing on the other thread. When you join, join with ONE character and be ready to listen to ME. Yes folks, I have been RPing for a long time, and it is about time this site gets some help. Sign up and learn how to role play! There are 3 basic groups you may be sorted into when you join: RP Group 1, 2, and 3. 1 is the best, 3 is the worst. Once you graduate from level 1 I will put you in another group. Join with this form on this thread!
Form-
Name: Gender: Personality: (Attributes AND faults!) History: (Make it interesting, but not stu/suish!) Sample RP: (Make it long and good.)
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Post by mistpaw on Aug 25, 2006 22:58:55 GMT -5
I will modify it!!!
Name:Mistpaw Gender:she-cat Personality: Sweet, but stubborn History: Mist has no idea who her parents were. She was only 2 moons old when her mother was killed by a rouge. She was to young to remember anything, but sometimes has flashes of remembrance, being picked up and carried away by a fellow loner who was good friends with her mom. The loner she lived with was named Jocob, and he was a magnificent Russian Blue. He was later hit by a monster, leaving the kit, which he had named Mist, his cave. At the age of 5 moons, Mist found herself utterly alone in the world. She made friends with a clan cat named Runningwind, who taught her how to fight and hunt. They became fast friends, but Runningwind died of greencough before he had the chance to invite her to the clan. Again, Mist found herself alone. She closed herself up to the world, receiving dreams from her ancestors (Shimmer Warriors, she called them) that prophecized of danger. She told the clans her dreams, and gradualy opened back up when tay accepted her into it.
Sample RP: Mist looked at the motionless body of the cat who had been for so long her guardian. Tears streamed form her eyes, and her wails of pure sadness echoed throughout the forest. She slowly dug a hole in the back of the cave, and dragged his body into it. Mist picked up a poppy seed and swallowed it, falling into a drugged sleep. The next morning she woke up early, expecting the familiar yowl of Jocob telling her that he had caught her a mouse. Then the revelation of the previous day came crashing down on her. Mist went out into the forest and pounced on a mouse that had come into sight almost instantly. All of a sudden she felt sharp claws digging into her back "Who are you?"she heard the deep voice hiss.
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Post by Lightningstar on Aug 26, 2006 1:05:34 GMT -5
That's wondeful, Mistpaw. Good roleplaying! I accept you, but I'm going to let Foxstar decide what group you should be in! ;D Thank you!
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Post by blackstorm on Aug 26, 2006 11:29:34 GMT -5
Name: Duskpaw Gender: Tom Personality: Very kind and caring, but can lose his temper such as with being taunted. Loves playing and hunting. Would fight someone, but being young, he isn't too good at it. History: He was left by his mother to his father, a loner, and captured by Twolegs. They tried to kill him, but he was rescued by a magnificant blue-grey cat named Stormheart. Stormheart took care of Duskpaw for a while, and WindClan took him in after Stormheart died in a battle. Sample RP: The dark brown cat cast a long shadow behind him as he walked in the sun. The shadow slowly streached at the sun began to sink. The Apprentice's pads touched the ground lightly as he wandered his Clan's border. Carbon left him in a sigh. The cat glanced at a tree that now covered him in shade. His form lowered to lay at its base. His eyes stared into the endless black hole of the sky. The stars began to cover the sky. "I'll miss you, Stormheart..." said the young tom. Just then, a star shot through the sky.
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Post by Lightningstar on Aug 26, 2006 12:05:22 GMT -5
Wow...I think you're a really good roleplayer. But I'll wait for Foxstar or the Claw to put you in a group! Thanks for joining! ;D
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Post by fox on Aug 26, 2006 13:46:11 GMT -5
Mistpaw-Read the thread I made about RPing here ( feralcats2.proboards80.com/index.cgi?board=rphelpboard&action=display&thread=1156253872 ), and if you want you may apply again or start in RP group 3. You are not RPing correctly at all, so please read that and either post your bio again or continue as a poor RPer. Personality: I expect more detail, and the word "sweet" is very relative. How is she sweet? Why? When is she not? What other faults does she have besides being stubborn? History: Very typical, you have taken the "orphan" approach. You have no idea how many cats are orphans in the RP world, but I guess as long as Mistpaw isn't out for revenge it is not terrible. Overall Grade: Try using a little button at the bottom of the page that says "spell check". It really does help! And always RP in the present tense unless you are telling a story! You are in Group #3 Duskpaw- You, like Mistpaw, need to read my thread on RPing here ( feralcats2.proboards80.com/index.cgi?board=rphelpboard&action=display&thread=1156253872) and either post your bio again or work from this point as a level 3 RPer. Personality: That is an okay personality, but try using correct grammar and spelling when you post. It can save us a lot of head aches, trust me. History: Again, the orphan thing. Let's think realistically: If a Twoleg tried to kill a clan cat, it probably would unless something particularlyweird happens, it would succeed, so make your history more realistic. Grade: Try RPing in the present tense, and use a wide vocabulary, and read the page on RPing. You are in class #3.
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Post by Lightningstar on Aug 26, 2006 14:08:31 GMT -5
Oh, that's right. I know that before this, we've been roleplaying with quotes (example: Lightningstar meowed, "Hello!"). But Foxstar has suggested another way that I like: with asterisks (example: **Lightningstar meowed,** Hello!). When roleplaying with asterisks, you put them around your actions and you don't do anything to words that your character is speaking. I'm sorry I haven't told everyone very well, so you probably didn't know. Do you understand now? Also, Foxstar's right, you should look at the RP guide that she made.
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Post by mistpaw on Aug 26, 2006 14:41:49 GMT -5
I will modify it!!!
Name:Mistpaw Gender:she-cat Personality: Sweet, but only when she wants something. She is shy when she meets other cats. History: Mist has no idea who her parents were. She was only 2 moons old when her mother was killed by a rouge. She was to young to remember anything, but sometimes has flashes of remembrance, being picked up and carried away by a fellow loner who was good friends with her mom. The loner she lived with was named Jocob, and he was a magnificent Russian Blue. He was later hit by a monster, leaving the kit, which he had named Mist, his cave. At the age of 5 moons, Mist found herself utterly alone in the world. She made friends with a clan cat named Runningwind, who taught her how to fight and hunt. They became fast friends, but Runningwind died of greencough before he had the chance to invite her to the clan. Again, Mist found herself alone. She closed herself up to the world, receiving dreams from her ancestors (Shimmer Warriors, she called them) that prophecized of danger. She told the clans her dreams, and gradually opened back up when they accepted her into it, because they were short on warriors.
Sample RP: Mist looked at the motionless body of the cat who had been for so long her guardian. Tears streamed form her eyes, and her wails of pure sadness echoed throughout the forest. She slowly dug a hole in the back of the cave, and dragged his body into it. Mist picked up a poppy seed and swallowed it, falling into a drugged sleep. The next morning she woke up early, expecting the familiar yowl of Jocob telling her that he had caught her a mouse. Then the revelation of the previous day came crashing down on her. Mist went out into the forest and pounced on a mouse that had come into sight almost instantly. All of a sudden she felt sharp claws digging into her back Who are you? *she heard the deep voice hiss*. Mist rolled over on her back, throwng the cat off her. Get off my territory! *Mist hissed*. The big cat looked taken aback. your territory? This land belongs to Riverclan! By the way, I'm Runningwind. *the cat said*I'm Mist. Tell me more about the clans!*she whispered*, entranced by the story he was weaving.
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Post by The Claw on Aug 26, 2006 16:02:31 GMT -5
OOC: May I butt in here? BIC: Mistpaw- I am glad you re-did your joining, but I have a few tips for you: Your Sample Role Playing: You still aren't doing it correctly. You are typing like this: "Who are you?" She heard the deep voice hiss when you should be typing like this: Who are you? * She heard the deep voice hiss* You never, ever use quotes and you surround your actions with stars (*). To type a star hold down the shift key and press 8 History: I think it is very unlikely that the clans would take you in simply because you had dreams. Maybe they had few apprentices, or something of the like.
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Post by woodpecker on Aug 26, 2006 16:17:15 GMT -5
Name:Notail Gender:Tom Personality: Happy but cranky! History: Notail started out as Browntail. He was in a battle not long before he was made an Elder. He was fighting alongside a fellow warrior when a rival jumped on his tail. He cut it off with a claw. When he was made an elder, he requested a name change. From then on he was known as Notail. Sample RP: AHHH! My tail!*Screamed Browntail, in anguish*. His tail was cut off! It hurt and bled so much. *Browntail fainted*. *He woke up later in the Medicine cat's den, where he was treated*. It was a long recupperation, but he survived, just barely,though.*He asked the medicine cat*, Will I survive? She didn't know.
Later,Browntail, you will now be known as Notail. The clan honors your bravery and hopes you get many moons of rest.*called the clan leader.Thank you! *replied Browntail*, Notail now. *He left to sit with the other elders*.
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Post by Lightningstar on Aug 26, 2006 16:38:16 GMT -5
That looks a lot better, Mistpaw. And you're accepted, Leafpool! Thanks for doing this, everybody! Oh, and you're VERY, very close to getting the RPing right. You see, the asterisks (*) go around your actions. So when you said , you would instead post, AHHH! My tail! *Screamed Browntail in anguish.*
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Post by |Morgen[Herz]|) on Aug 26, 2006 16:55:44 GMT -5
Name:Darkfur Gender:she-cat Personality: calm but grumpy History: Born and raised in Riverclan. Watched her best friend get slaughtered by rogues. Sample RP: *Darkfur ran into the clearing.* Rogues! *She yowled.* In our territory! *She ran over to Morningheart and grabbed her and told her to make a patrol. Then, she brought the patrol with her.* DIE ROGUES!!!!!!!!! *She killed 3 rogues but got scratched and bit in the process. But, at least she felt avenged for her best friend's death.*
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Post by fox on Aug 27, 2006 9:52:05 GMT -5
Notail-
You were doing okay until you got to the sample RP. Always put punctuaction INSIDE the asterisks (*) and RP in the present tense! Whenever you are doing something, or not talking, put the asterisks around your actions and everything that you aren't saying. Also, don't put unnecessary sentences in there! More vocabulary, and use the spell check. Also, avoid short sentences except every once in a while. Oh, and unless a cat has daggers instead of claws, they could never cut a tail off! They might rip it with their mouths, but their claws are only sharp at the points, and are not daggers. The start of the second paragraph is very fuzzy, and I don't even understand it. Your final RP should look something like this (This could still be a lot better, but this would do.):
AHHH! My tail! *Screams Browntail in anguish. His tail had been ripped off! It hurt and bled so much that Browntail fainted. He woke up later in the Medicine Cat's den, where he was treated. He asks the medicine cat.* Will I survive?
*After Browntail recovered, he walked over to the high rock where a meeting was being held. The clan leader was mewing an announcement.** Browntail, you will now be known as Notail. The clan honors your bravery and hopes you get many moons of rest. *Calls the clan leader.* Thank you! *replies who was once Browntail, but Notail now. He left, trotting over to sit with the other elders.*
Browntail is in class 3.Darkfur- More detail on the personality and history, they are very brief.
RPing: Always, always, always role play in the present tense! Darkfur doesn't "ran" into the clear, Darkfur runs into the clearing. Also, what clearing? "The clearing" isn't a name, so describe your surroundings.
Also, in battles, no god-moding. That is when you are a ridiculously good fighter and kill a lot of cats with no problem, or dodge almost every blow. In your case, you slaughtered three rogue cats in a single post without them even putting up a fight. Extremely unrealistic, plus it spoils the fun for everybody else. You are doing what's called "hogging the action", and leaving nothing for the next RPer. Rogues are really good fighters, in fact, every cat in the warrior's series are good fighters, so even killing one cat without getting seriously injured is very hard!
NO flaming, or typing in all capital letters, no matter how mad you are at the person you are talking to! It will make you not only look like an imbocile, but that's acting like one too!
You must have more detail. You got scratched and bit, of course, but where?
Also, you "grabbed Morningheart". No auto-hits. Never, none, no way! Thats another way to make you look like a fool! You can post "attempted to grab" or "grabbed in her direction" but not that she did it. In this case, Morningheart is your alt, so it is OK. But otherwise, don't do it!
You are in RP Class 3.Mistpaw- Yay, you re-did it! **Uproarous appluase.** That's great, and I really appreciate the effort you are putting into this! You are doing great for your first time, and thanks for trying again! Yay!
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Post by mistpaw on Aug 27, 2006 16:57:48 GMT -5
am I still in 3? ?
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Post by fox on Aug 28, 2006 8:59:11 GMT -5
Mistpaw, you are in 2 for effort, because I can tell you are working really hard. You guys all make me very sad: I am making the RP center to help you, not to make you angry. When I learned how to RP like this, the RP Center was fun for me. RPing is the point of the site, so when you do it really well, it can be really fun, but when you do poorly, sometimes we land up making OOC posts saying "I don't understand..." and etc. Plus, when people RP poorly and aren't taught how to do it correctly, they don't get better, they get worse, until their posts are crud. Believe me, I have seen it happen before, people posting "lol" in their RPing, and "omg". Why not just spell your posts right to save us a bunch of headaches? Is correct grammar too hard for you? Is capitalization not important? I can't believe you guys don't care. Here's a little story by a person I cannot call a friend, but a leader, Saythe Streambattle- Once upon a time, their were no computers, so what kids did for entertainment was reading books (They didn't "have" to, they liked it)So one day, the computer came, and a group of appreciative kids decidided to create a website about their favorite book series. They whould pretend they where a character and role play that character, like it was a book. Instead of RPing with quotations, they used asterisks. These first RPers where really good, because they based their RPing a lot on the books they read. These were the veterans of RPing who had loads of fun through fantastic adventures and battles. Then, years after, came new people. These "newbies" where very bad RPers, and few were eager to learn, so they used "chat speak", abbreviations like lol, omg, and pos. They were soon called n00bs by the veterans, who tried to deal with them. The veterans where tired of these spammers who where a pain in the neck, but friendly to the eager-to-learn newbies. The end to this story has two possible endings: A.) The veterans teach all the n00bs to RP better, and they n00bs turn into newbies. or... B.) The n00bs overwhelm the vets and the veterans leave the site as a n00b hive, where RPing never is good, almost unreadable.
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